The Forest Shadow Pack
The Forest Shadow Pack where you can do more than role-play a wolf. Join us and expect lots of fun!

Loose yourselves in a whole new world where you can forget about your everyday life for a moment!


The forst seamed silent and lifeless, but don't be fooled. Look around carefully, do you see the glint of eyes among the trees? Can you feel the pack watching and waiting silently?
 
HomeCalendarFAQSearchMemberlistUsergroupsRegisterLog in
We are doing some site changes and things although if you would like to join us still, you may. Please be patient with our work! Razzu Deputy/Admin
RP TIME
Time in Hong Kong:
Search
 
 

Display results as :
 
Rechercher Advanced Search
Log in
Username:
Password:
Log in automatically: 
:: I forgot my password
Latest topics
» The High Rock
Fri Jul 05, 2013 2:14 pm by Razzu

» The four clans
Tue Dec 25, 2012 4:01 pm by Fang

» The Golden Prairies
Thu Nov 15, 2012 9:59 pm by Wind

» Lupus Mons Montis
Wed Nov 07, 2012 7:21 pm by Wind

July 2017
MonTueWedThuFriSatSun
     12
3456789
10111213141516
17181920212223
24252627282930
31      
CalendarCalendar
Top posting users this month
Top posters
Rezsia
 
Razzu
 
Aura
 
Fang
 
Miller
 
Wind
 
Tammer
 
Brookelle
 
Tykhe
 
Grimm
 

Share | 
 

 Confliction

View previous topic View next topic Go down 
AuthorMessage
Rezsia
Admin
avatar

Wolf Gender :
Wolf Age : 2 years
Deputy
Crush On : Perhaps Fang
Mate : No one
The Council
Health :
200 / 100200 / 100

Experience :
200 / 200200 / 200

Strength :
180 / 200180 / 200

Speed :
180 / 200180 / 200

Agility :
180 / 200180 / 200

Wisdom :
180 / 200180 / 200

Dominant's Trust :
200 / 200200 / 200

Reputation : 7


PostSubject: Confliction    Thu Jun 28, 2012 4:01 pm

Confliction

What the night hides?

The night is dark, the night is still.

The soft whispering of leaves the only sound.

From the dark a golden gleam;

A pair of eyes,

The tiger stood waiting; alert, deadly.


What does he guard?

A dark opening deep in the hills.

Amber eyes narrowed, soon the fight to be began.

Quick silent paws padded, the brush of soft fur.

In the cave is the wolf, waiting, struggling to be freed.


What the wolf wants?

The snow, the sun, the cool brush of the wind.

A dream that is unattainable,

The freedom to run, to leap, to dream.


What the fight brings?

Snarls, growls, the flash of teeth.

Blood flowed, strength struggling against strength.

An opening and the wolf leapt,

But the fangs blocked the attack again and again.

Night after night, day after day, the endless struggle.


Who am I?

I am the tiger, I am the wolf.

Two conflicting personalities,

Anger, aggression, love yet to be freed.

My spirit is raw; it is old and it is young.

The hidden gentleness, always the need to pretend.

My heart is protected,

By the golden eyes.

The wolf is forever trapped, howling for the sun.

But finally is allowed to be free

You have reached passed all my defenses,

Called the tiger to sleep.

The wolf takes the first step,

The joy, the wonder, the yearning to have more.

He shall never retreat back into the dark and the fear



Last edited by Rezsia on Thu Jun 28, 2012 8:17 pm; edited 1 time in total
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://forestshadow.findtalk.biz
Guest
Guest



PostSubject: Re: Confliction    Thu Jun 28, 2012 5:37 pm

Omg, I love this one so much. The grammar is splendid, as well! Superior to Daphne's in every way! :3 Though, "ember" is the smouldering remains of a fire, "amber" is probably what you mean, as it's a golden-honey colour that could remind one of a flame's hue. Though, I have a little issue with "soon the fight to be began". I think "to" should be replaced with "will". "Struggle" in "strength struggle against strength" should be "struggling", "the wolf leap" should be "the wolf leapt" or "leaped".

I also think that "But finally he is freed, allowed to be free" is redundant. xD The "allowed to be free" isn't actually necessary. And there's a typo. "Hav" should be "have". "Urning" is rare slang for a male homosexual, by the way. I believe "yearning" should be there. xD Other than that, this one is amazing.

Much superior to Daphne's.

Like this one:

"I never felt this way before...
But why this is so dark?
This is so fitting to my feelings... They puzzle and kill me...
I feel like I'm grasping, this world can't let me free!

Tears run from my eyes, I just can't understand
You said "Everything is alright",
But I don't feel it, I can't feel it!
I don't want to feel it!
Why this is so painful?
Every choice in my life, came to pain!
Why happiness doesn't work?!

Don't try to befriend me now,
I'm afraid of facing this whole world,
Of facing you!
Some many times I'm fooled. Now I just see the darkness I'm in..."

xD "WHY HAPPINESS DOESN'T WORK?!" Emotional, but dear god. xD It's so hammy.
Back to top Go down
Rezsia
Admin
avatar

Wolf Gender :
Wolf Age : 2 years
Deputy
Crush On : Perhaps Fang
Mate : No one
The Council
Health :
200 / 100200 / 100

Experience :
200 / 200200 / 200

Strength :
180 / 200180 / 200

Speed :
180 / 200180 / 200

Agility :
180 / 200180 / 200

Wisdom :
180 / 200180 / 200

Dominant's Trust :
200 / 200200 / 200

Reputation : 7


PostSubject: Re: Confliction    Thu Jun 28, 2012 8:18 pm

Thank you again Razz glad you liked it. And also thanks for saving me from embarrassment by using urning lol lol I agree, and also, I think she tried to use too much words. xD


Last edited by Rezsia on Thu Jun 28, 2012 8:22 pm; edited 1 time in total
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://forestshadow.findtalk.biz
Sponsored content




PostSubject: Re: Confliction    

Back to top Go down
 
Confliction
View previous topic View next topic Back to top 
Page 1 of 1

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
The Forest Shadow Pack :: Leisure :: Art Section :: Literature-
Jump to: